I need some help on the following custom rule for a RPG mini.

Quantum Transporter (Replaces attacks, Adrianna can transport herself and up to 3 adjacent small or medium characters to up 10 squares away from her starting position, this movement ignores all terrain, walls and objects. this does not provoke attacks of opportunity. Adrianna and all character's must end there move in legal squares. All transported characters are considered activated this round save 11.

Does this read OK? can anyone suggest better wording? Does 31 points seem OK?


Character's full stats (faction Old Republic)
Adrianna
cost 31
Hit points 70
Defence 19
Attack 0
Damage 0

Unique, Team one
Quantum Transporter (Replaces attacks, Adrianna can transport herself and up to 3 adjacent small or medium characters to up 10 squares away from her starting position, this movement ignores all terrain, walls and objects. this does not provoke attacks of opportunity. Adrianna and all character's must end there move in legal squares. All transported characters are considered activated this round save 11.
Evade
Rapport 5 (A character whose name contains "Cash" cost 5 points less when in the same squad as this character)

Force powers
Force 5

PS Cash is another RPG character.

Thanks, made the changes you suggested except the Replaces Turn, Reason been is that the character is not really meant to be played in normal games. Will only be used in RPG games. Also there a 50% chance that Adrianna and each transpoeted characters are activated if they fail the save of 11. I gave her a cost though just in case she is ever used in a casual game.


Anyway you asked about "Cash"

General Cash is from the far future, who went back in time to try and save hes family. Unfortunately he ended transported to an ancient ship instead(the sort that appeared in the cartoon about the force wielders and Dawn of the Jedi comic) The ships crew were not on board but when Cash got there he inadvertently activated the ships sentient computer. Adrianna is the the ships avatar (much like Andromeda from the T.V show of the same name). Cash used the ship to travel the time stream to try to changed events in time but after several futile attempts he spends most of hes time in the Old Republic (Nomi Sunrider's Era) There he became the leader of a joint task-force of a Jedi and military strike-team called Team One. At the moment he does not know that one of hes team mates is one of the ships original crew and a immortal force wielder.
When Adrianna transports people she does so by way of the ancient ship and can do so to any point in time and space.


Thanks again for the suggestions.

Yes. Both of these were created about 12 years ago. I recently changed the ancient ship to the diamond one from the cartoon and comics though to make it more in line with Star Wars history.

Ok thanks, if it is placement, then what would the wording need to be?

You are also correct in that the characters would end there movement adjacent to Adrianna. I am having a problem now in fitting all the text on the card. So am going to need quite a bit of rewording to get all the text on the card.

I could drop evade to save space and lower her cost by 2? I feel though that without evade she would not have much survivability.

Thank you for the suggestions, all good and will endeavor to get the wording right before I print the card. So if you have any more suggestions to slim down the text but still be adequate/right I would be thankful.

Quantum Transporter (Replaces attacks: Reposition This character and up to 3 adjacent medium or smaller allies to any legal position within 10 squares ignoring walls. All repositioned characters must remain adjacent. This does not count as movement. All characters are considered activated, save 11.)

The nit-picker in me thinks the last line should say "All repositioned characters...".

Also, each character would have to end up no more than 10 squares from where they started. It's fine that way, just limits choice of primary square a bit if trying to relocate multiple characters.